Well done Milly this is excellent. You have thought carefully about the adjectives you have used and used features of a diary entry. I love the line ‘like a pot of sparkly glitter had exploded all over my tent’ it really helped me to imagine it!
Keep up the good work,
Mrs Arnold
Great work Milly. I love your diary entry. I can imagine the tent all sparkly from the diamond ring. Well done.
Mrs Laishley
Completely agree with Mrs Arnold and Mrs Laishley. Love the glitter explosion. Every story should have some sparkle in it. 🙂
Mrs Bird
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Well done Milly this is excellent. You have thought carefully about the adjectives you have used and used features of a diary entry. I love the line ‘like a pot of sparkly glitter had exploded all over my tent’ it really helped me to imagine it!
Keep up the good work,
Mrs Arnold
Great work Milly. I love your diary entry. I can imagine the tent all sparkly from the diamond ring. Well done.
Mrs Laishley
Completely agree with Mrs Arnold and Mrs Laishley. Love the glitter explosion. Every story should have some sparkle in it. 🙂
Mrs Bird