well done Jai and Merik on the first line it has 8 beats the second line has 8 beats and
the third line has 8 beats it is like the pithon is going to sleep
In the first, forth and sixth
line you have put 10 silibles because they all
talk about how the snake moves and how
the snake doesn’t rest. On the fith line
you have put 11 silibles because you
describe in a bit more detail.In the
second line you have put 8 silibles
because of a short sentence for
impact.
You have put 10 beats in the first line , I think you did this because a rest is long so the line is long.
I think you have put 10 9 8 and 7 beats to explain about the snakes life.
well done Jai and Merik on the first line it has 8 beats the second line has 8 beats and
the third line has 8 beats it is like the pithon is going to sleep
On your 1st line it has 11 desaball .On your 7th line it is the truth.
In the first, forth and sixth
line you have put 10 silibles because they all
talk about how the snake moves and how
the snake doesn’t rest. On the fith line
you have put 11 silibles because you
describe in a bit more detail.In the
second line you have put 8 silibles
because of a short sentence for
impact.
I think that the bottem line is shorter because its for impact and to tell you that not to hurt any animals
there are a lot of big lines so it more life.
on the first fourth and sixth you have used 10 beats to describe how the snake is moving