A long time ago, in the peaceful countryside lived a timid girl called Jess. Happily, she lived with her mother in a little cottage by a beautiful field of brightly coloured flowers. Jess had beautiful, red hair and majestic, glowing, sparkly, blue eyes.
One by one, exhausted my friends and I acended the steep, dangerous balcony. Dumbfounded, I was just so amazed I burst into tears. I was that happy I shouted “HOORAY” from the top of the mountain. The views were amazing and I actually coudn’t believe I made it . “I DID IT !!!”
Charlotte 4H
When we had our lovely breakfast we set off to start climbing though stage 1 the hazardrous kumba ice-fall which is part of the biggest mountain on earth
Tyler Inman
Unexpectedly, being very sneeky Jammy jumped into the ginormas hole and landed with a big thump! Quickly the troll jolted down the hole and found Jammy. Determinedly, he shut him in the stinky, old dunjun.as fast as lightning, they got Jammy out and started to climb the rest of the mountain.
All of a sudden, a tiny gummy bear appeared out of the darkness. Helpfully, the gummy bear helped the suffering boy. Out of nowhere, Randy appeared and saved him and the sticky gummy bear
Apprehensively, Jeff crawled into the dark, gloomy cave. Then, Jeff gave a poison potion to the dirty troll and his assistant. Bob and Jeff legged it out of the dark,gloomy,cave.
Marco year 4.
Quickly, Simon and ksi got in a black and red lambaguin. Hurriedly, they raced off and and unfortuantely police came. They drove to the enormes mountrain an i fell a sleep in my lambaguin. Excitedly, they began to climb the magestic mountain.
Ethan.
On the rocky sumit, Kat who was bleeding needed a clean bandage. “OUCH” howled Kat when Leonidas cleaned the wound and and applied the clean bandage. An hour later, they could see a weird man with the same clothes as Stan but he had disturbing white eyes.
Hurridly, they arrived at the dark scary forest and the sun was fighting it’s way through the puffy clouds. As they trudged
through the chocolate puddles,Thomas found a glowing glistning bean.
Peacefully, Emma asked her gran if she could go and climb the nearby hill which had lots of mossy roks on it.While the whispering wind blew, Emma rolled down the steep green hill.Friendly Emma stumbled up the steep , grassy hill but just then she spotted a shining bottle. Naomi varley
I was nearly at the summit when ice fell and it nearly hit me. I was petrified! As I appoached the balcony, I was worried, shattered, tired and exhausted.
When you reach the summit have a nice cup of hot chocolate with marshmellows and you will feel much better. Wrap up warm in your sleeping bag and you will have a good nights sleep on top of the mountain. Or just stay in the hotel!!
One day to sisters went on an exiting adventure . Quickly the girls ran to the center of the dark gloomey forest In the forest was a giant black hole.steadly they jumped into the big black hole. it was cold and damp and scary. they slipped down the hole.
They could see a piece of paper that looked old although interesting. It was a map, that was old, that led to a mountain. After, they went home and had tea.
Cautiously, ant was hanging on the edge of a sharp rock so he got out some rope. Carefully, he tied the rope to a rock and swung to flat ground.
Edward,
The map sounds interesting and makes me want to find out more. I think Ant was very brave when he was swinging off the sharp rock – it sounds foolish and good fun at the same time!!
I had to climb Mount Everest all my life. There were other people with me and I felt really really scared at base camp and at base camp felt really cold and I couldn’t feel my fingers.
William
Adventuours Tim had a dream about climbing a giant mountain. Then, he woke up and tould his best friend about it. Tim was a loving boy but he did not have many friends.He has black hair and shiny blue eyes. He always wore a bright cool chain.Tim’s best friend was Harry who had blonde hair and blue shiny eyes.
Ellia.w 4H
Silently,the two friends woke up next tto them was a rocky dangerous mountain .Quickly, a gigantic spider jumped out and scared Max and Jeff in fear , Jeff found two lethal swords Dangerously ,Jeff , Max and the Spider fought to the death.
During the climb, there was a massive archway witch was caused by two blocks of ice. The enormous crevasse was SOOOOOOOO!!!!! steep and wide that I couldn`t look at it. Although I felt like I was going to fall, my friends kept me going.
I am so pleased that year 4 have shared their fantastic sentences. I was REALLY proud of how hard they all worked during the project. They produced some fantastic writing. Well done year 4.
The next early morning, I got out of my warm orange tent and made myself some hot chocolate and some thick bread
chloe.c
Lovely sentence and good use of describing words.
Mom x
Kind-hearted Charlie had chocolate brown, short hair and grass green eyes.
Eleanor.
A long time ago, in the peaceful countryside lived a timid girl called Jess. Happily, she lived with her mother in a little cottage by a beautiful field of brightly coloured flowers. Jess had beautiful, red hair and majestic, glowing, sparkly, blue eyes.
Signed:Beata
One by one, exhausted my friends and I acended the steep, dangerous balcony. Dumbfounded, I was just so amazed I burst into tears. I was that happy I shouted “HOORAY” from the top of the mountain. The views were amazing and I actually coudn’t believe I made it . “I DID IT !!!”
Charlotte 4H
What a lovely, descriptive sentence.
In the morning I was joined by a brave, bold sherpa to help me on my journey up the breathtaking Mountain Everest.
Toby.
Nice one Tobes really good work!!
Nervously, they decided to explore the dark cave. Edging towards the cave, they crawled through the small entrance.
Thomas year 4
a good sentance. it describes their nervousness, they must have been a bit scared…
When we had our lovely breakfast we set off to start climbing though stage 1 the hazardrous kumba ice-fall which is part of the biggest mountain on earth
Tyler Inman
I love Tyler’s use of descriptive language, it makes you feel as if you can feel the cold, still air.
🙂
Unexpectedly, being very sneeky Jammy jumped into the ginormas hole and landed with a big thump! Quickly the troll jolted down the hole and found Jammy. Determinedly, he shut him in the stinky, old dunjun.as fast as lightning, they got Jammy out and started to climb the rest of the mountain.
All of a sudden, a tiny gummy bear appeared out of the darkness. Helpfully, the gummy bear helped the suffering boy. Out of nowhere, Randy appeared and saved him and the sticky gummy bear
Harry.P y4
did he eat the gummy bear?
Apprehensively, Jeff crawled into the dark, gloomy cave. Then, Jeff gave a poison potion to the dirty troll and his assistant. Bob and Jeff legged it out of the dark,gloomy,cave.
Marco year 4.
Quickly, Simon and ksi got in a black and red lambaguin. Hurriedly, they raced off and and unfortuantely police came. They drove to the enormes mountrain an i fell a sleep in my lambaguin. Excitedly, they began to climb the magestic mountain.
Ethan.
On the rocky sumit, Kat who was bleeding needed a clean bandage. “OUCH” howled Kat when Leonidas cleaned the wound and and applied the clean bandage. An hour later, they could see a weird man with the same clothes as Stan but he had disturbing white eyes.
I like your sentenses sabian!
Im intrigued to find out what happens next…
Its a little bit scary!
(mom)
Hurridly, they arrived at the dark scary forest and the sun was fighting it’s way through the puffy clouds. As they trudged
through the chocolate puddles,Thomas found a glowing glistning bean.
Barnaby
I liked the puffy clouds comment because your description was effective
Dear Diary,
Early in the morning, at basecamp I set up my tent and then sorted out the colorful, bright flags.
I love your it that you started with Dear Diary .
One sunny morning,best friends Eleanor and Emily exsitedly got ready to go on an adventure over the high hills.
Evie.
I hope your adventure was exciting and learnt lot’s about the mountain. I wish I could have come with you on that adventure.
Peacefully, Emma asked her gran if she could go and climb the nearby hill which had lots of mossy roks on it.While the whispering wind blew, Emma rolled down the steep green hill.Friendly Emma stumbled up the steep , grassy hill but just then she spotted a shining bottle. Naomi varley
What a lovely sentence….my favourite bit is the ‘whispering wind’ – this is a great adjective, and it even sounds a bit like the wind! Fab.
Love mum x
I was nearly at the summit when ice fell and it nearly hit me. I was petrified! As I appoached the balcony, I was worried, shattered, tired and exhausted.
Signed: Maddie
When you reach the summit have a nice cup of hot chocolate with marshmellows and you will feel much better. Wrap up warm in your sleeping bag and you will have a good nights sleep on top of the mountain. Or just stay in the hotel!!
Nervously, me and my group started to climb the majestic mountain.
Chloe.H
I like the description of how she was feeling and the use of capital letters, comas and full stop.
One day to sisters went on an exiting adventure . Quickly the girls ran to the center of the dark gloomey forest In the forest was a giant black hole.steadly they jumped into the big black hole. it was cold and damp and scary. they slipped down the hole.
This is amazing! I really like your adjectives of the forest and the hole. Well done I think you should write a book with 560 pages:-)
I really like your adjectives of the hole and the forest.
Bulky ben and Jolly Jeff drank the pink sparkling potion.
they found themselves on the very top of the mountain.
the boys saw a green goblin.
charlie bown
They could see a piece of paper that looked old although interesting. It was a map, that was old, that led to a mountain. After, they went home and had tea.
Cautiously, ant was hanging on the edge of a sharp rock so he got out some rope. Carefully, he tied the rope to a rock and swung to flat ground.
Edward,
The map sounds interesting and makes me want to find out more. I think Ant was very brave when he was swinging off the sharp rock – it sounds foolish and good fun at the same time!!
This comment was by my Dad – not me!
I had to climb Mount Everest all my life. There were other people with me and I felt really really scared at base camp and at base camp felt really cold and I couldn’t feel my fingers.
William
Adventuours Tim had a dream about climbing a giant mountain. Then, he woke up and tould his best friend about it. Tim was a loving boy but he did not have many friends.He has black hair and shiny blue eyes. He always wore a bright cool chain.Tim’s best friend was Harry who had blonde hair and blue shiny eyes.
Ellia.w 4H
I loved how descriptive Ellia was when describing Tim’s appearance. Amy Haines (Chloe Haines mom)
One hour later, Bob and Geoff went to look for a forest with a gigantic moutain
Frantically, Geoff looked around for bob
stanley
Silently,the two friends woke up next tto them was a rocky dangerous mountain .Quickly, a gigantic spider jumped out and scared Max and Jeff in fear , Jeff found two lethal swords Dangerously ,Jeff , Max and the Spider fought to the death.
During the climb, there was a massive archway witch was caused by two blocks of ice. The enormous crevasse was SOOOOOOOO!!!!! steep and wide that I couldn`t look at it. Although I felt like I was going to fall, my friends kept me going.
signed:Ines
I like the first person perspective as a good way to feel the mountain real sensations. I like also the mention to friends.
Before the climb, I felt apperhensive and anxcions .Eshpeshally novracking I thourght I woundn`t be able to do the whole thing.
sighed :Mehreen
I loved the description that Samuel used in this sentences and the story was very exciting.
I am so pleased that year 4 have shared their fantastic sentences. I was REALLY proud of how hard they all worked during the project. They produced some fantastic writing. Well done year 4.
I love doing the mountain project ,it was fantastic Mrs Mitchell .