Outstanding writing Harvey! I am so impressed. It reads so well so I can tell you carefully checked your work! This would be a head teachers award if we were at school!
I love the onomatopoeia you used – splash
I love your conjunctions – because, but, and
I love you simile – like a torrent of icy water
You used fronted adverbials, questions and new words
Outstanding writing Harvey! I am so impressed. It reads so well so I can tell you carefully checked your work! This would be a head teachers award if we were at school!
I love the onomatopoeia you used – splash
I love your conjunctions – because, but, and
I love you simile – like a torrent of icy water
You used fronted adverbials, questions and new words
well done!