Well done Ollie, this is excellent. You have used lots of features of a persuasive text including flattery. I like the way you have referred to Bilbo as the ‘strongest person’ and ‘brave’ and you have made the trip sound very appealing by ending with ‘the chance of a lifetime’. Fantastic effort!
I loved your persuasive writing too. We all like to be flattered and Gandalf has done it well. Strongest and bravest should work for Bilbo. A great piece of writing. Good work Oliver! Well done.
Well done Ollie, this is excellent. You have used lots of features of a persuasive text including flattery. I like the way you have referred to Bilbo as the ‘strongest person’ and ‘brave’ and you have made the trip sound very appealing by ending with ‘the chance of a lifetime’. Fantastic effort!
Keep up the good work,
Mrs Arnold
Great work. I think Bilbo would be persuaded to go along with you!
Mrs Bird
I loved your persuasive writing too. We all like to be flattered and Gandalf has done it well. Strongest and bravest should work for Bilbo. A great piece of writing. Good work Oliver! Well done.
Mrs Laishley