I LOVE how you have presented this with his head and the thought bubble! It is an amazing story Harvey. I loved reading it and there are hardly any mistakes! GREAT work! I like your use of questions and ambitious vocabulary such as clenched. Well done for using onomatopoeia and repeating it – thud, thud, thud
I LOVE how you have presented this with his head and the thought bubble! It is an amazing story Harvey. I loved reading it and there are hardly any mistakes! GREAT work! I like your use of questions and ambitious vocabulary such as clenched. Well done for using onomatopoeia and repeating it – thud, thud, thud
Spelling error – whacked not wacked
I liked how you used trembling with fear as it made it flow. Hope you’re okay!
Super work Harvey I really enjoyed reading it. I also like how you presented the work it made it eye catching and made me want to read it.
Mrs Roberts