Bubbles diary entry by Zachary

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2 Responses to Bubbles diary entry by Zachary

  1. Year 5 says:

    I love the background! It really fits with the diary entry.

    Well done for using parenthesis with the dashes! And well done for using the rhetorical question to get us thinking!

    I really like the mysterious ending and your use of fronted adverbials!

    Next time maybe try to use a : or ;

  2. 14IBridge says:

    I love the backround it matches with the story my favourite bit was the ending because you used emotion and it was very mysterious.

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