Wow another great story Harvey. I definitely owe you a head teacher’s award when we are back at school!
Again, I love the suspense you created and the magic you included. I like the shrink ray and the magic hole. Well done for using speech marks and lots of fronted adverbials like one afternoon, a minute later and the next day. Amazing use of new words like futuristic, wrenched and straggling! I can’t wait to read your next one.
I love your picture that matches your story!
Little tip for next time – remember your commas after your fronted adverbials.
Wow another great story Harvey. I definitely owe you a head teacher’s award when we are back at school!
Again, I love the suspense you created and the magic you included. I like the shrink ray and the magic hole. Well done for using speech marks and lots of fronted adverbials like one afternoon, a minute later and the next day. Amazing use of new words like futuristic, wrenched and straggling! I can’t wait to read your next one.
I love your picture that matches your story!
Little tip for next time – remember your commas after your fronted adverbials.
Thank you for posting my work. I’ve got lots more to come!
I’ll try and remember to use commas next time.
Well done Harvey i love the picture and writing and i liked that you used your imagination!